I have just had my one on one with Sally about my first draft of my essay, it’s well written BUT! I kind of didn’t mention in my introduction what I really want to talk about, I need to narrow it down. And focus on 3 different theories about SOCIAL impact, COMMUNICATION impact and MULTIPLAYER in general. I also need to reference properly as I have put a whole resource as my reference instead of just the Author and the date in brackets.
Have a balance of Online, Magazine and Academic references in the essay.